Wednesday, June 13, 2007

kahaani ek dalaal ki

pichle dino jo achhi kahaaniya padhi usme se sabse jyaada jis kahaani ne prabhawit kiya woh kahaani hai .."woh meri aurat thi pyaare bhaai"....aur is bejod kahaani ko likhne waale hai krishna raghav jo film aur tv ki duniya ke sidhhast nirdeshak hai..film institute puna ke graduate...."woh meri aurat ...." apne terah ki anoothi kahaani hai.... na to kisi khaas shilp ke tarj par likhi gayi kahaani na koi paramparik aakhyaan par uske bawjod kahaani humein bhawnao ki aisi duniya me jaa patakti hai ki hum bas hairaan hokar kahaanikaar ke baare me sochne lagte hai...kahaani ke sutrdhhar hai munshi ji jo jawaani beetakar ab budhaape ki taraf badh rahe hai lekin laundo se roz chaay ki dukan me hansi thitholi kerna nahi bhoolte...shaam ko niyat samay paanch baje munshi ji padhaarte hai aur naujwaano me nai urjaa daal dete..us shaam bhi kuch aise hi baat chal rahi hoti hai ek naujwaan apni premika ko yaad kar dukhi hai aur baar baar ek hi baat kehta hai main uske liye mar jaaunga..munshi ji se jab nahi raha gaya to unhone chay ka glass bench per patka..chay thodi chalki..aur phir munshi ji ki baat hawaa me tair gayi..."amaa chodo yaar pyaar me mara nahi jiya jaata hai yaaron..jiya jaata hai." ladko ko lagaa ki munshi ji sathiya gaye hai isiliye aisi baat kar rahe hai lekin nahi..munshi ji gambhir the aur phir unhone ek kahaani sunaai..kahaani jo mumbai ki hai
ye kahaani nathu dale ki hai jo munshi ji ke mumbai ke dino me room partner hua karta tha..musnhi ji bataate hai ki pehle to kai dino tak pata hi nahi chalaa ki who kaam kya kerta hai kyunki main subeh subeh jo kaam ko nikla to shaam ko aata aur who shaam ko kaam pe jaata aur subeh aata..kabhi kabhar dikaahi de jaata par apni bistar pe behosh soya hua..phir ek din munshi ji ki chutti ke roz dono me baatcheet hui aur pata chalaa ki who kamaathipura me dale ka kaam kerta hai…munshi ji thode peche hat gaye..”..main maan nahi sakta ki tumhare jaisa insaan yahan dalla banne aaya hoga…
natthu kehta hai ki aaya to who hero banne tha ..amitabh ko jeb me lekar ghoomta tha par jab saachai saamne aa gai to mujhe bhi kuch kamaane ki jaroorat padi..to main is line me a gaya
“kyun tum kuch aur bhi kaam kar sakte the izzatdaar kaam….. tumhe Sharm nahi aati itna ghatiya kaam karte hue”
tum dila do nathu dale ne chute hi kaha
barhain bhi paas nahi hoo…
aur is terah kuch baatein hoti rahi aur agle din se main use doosri nazar se dekhne lagaa..par dhire dhire humaare beech duriyaan kam hoti gayi aur ek din uanw ek baat bataai “yaar main tang aa gaya hoo is ladki se..
kisse..
are wahi jiske liye main gahak dhoondhtaa hoo…rani kehti hai ki mujhse pyaar karti hai …wo kehti hai ki main usse shadi kar loon…aur apni saari kamaai us pe lutaaon
munshi ji beech me bol pade “ aur tune ye paise apne liye jamaa kiya hai taaki tu fridge tv coler le sake..
nathu –bilukl maine ye pasie apni aatma ko bechkar kamaaya hai ..aur inse mujhe nai jindagi shuroo karni hai …
aur raani ka kya hoga..
nathu- wo paagal hai wo nahi samjhati ki use abhi meri jaroorat nahi hai ..
baat aayi gayi ho gayi….ek din maine kaha ki mujhe bhi koi maal dilaa do..to munshi ji chale gaye un galiyon me…nathu ne sabki terah munshi ji ko raani ke paas bhej diya…
kamre ke andar rani ne kapde to utaar diye par fut fut kar ro rahi thi ki wo tumhara dost hai tum use samjaate kyun nahi ki main usse pyaar kerti hoo.munshi ji use aansuo ka bhaar sah nahi sake aur baahar nikal aaye…..
aakar unhone raju ko fatkaar lagaaya ki itna jo tumse payaar karti hai to tu usse shaadi kyun nahi kar leta .tum dono ko is nark se chutti mil jaayegi..jawaab me raju muskura diya...kaise baat karte ho yaar..wo bazzar ki randi hai ...woh apne grahak ko condom ke liye jabardasti bhi nahi karti ...aisi ladki se kaun shaadi karega..maine to 3 fds bank me jamaa kar rakhe hai ..aur mujhe flat lekar ek nai jindagi shuroo karni hai..
waqt badaltaa raha..nathu raani ko condom ke liye kehta raha par woh nahi maani..kaafi din beete raju ghar nahi lauta to mujhe chinta hui ..phir ek din woh kaafi jaldi me aaya…sharir me haddiyan nazar aa rahi thi dadhi betarteeb se kai dino ki badhi hui thi. usi se pata chalaa ki rani ke HIV jaanch ka result positive hai aur woh hospital me admit hai..munshi ji uske saath dekhne gaye ..ek kone me raani thithuri hui gathri ki terah padi thi..aur raju hospital ke bill bhar rha tha....ek ek kar usne apni dono fds tudwa di par phir bhi illaj me koi sudhaar nahi ho raha tha..aur ek din subeh subeh pata chala ki woh nahi rahi...usne apni teesri fd tudwaa di thi aur usse rani ke antim sanskaar ki vyavsthaa ki..phir bhi uske paas kuch paise kam pad gaye to usne munshi ji se liye...agle din raju ne munshi ji ke paise lautaa diye ..munshi ne manaa kiya ki uske prati thoda farz to uska bhi bantaa hai par raju ne manaa kar diya aur kahaa ki nahi ...wo meri aurat thi bhaai uska saara kharch main hi uthaaunga.....maine kaha tha tab use meri jaroorat nahi thi tab uske paas grahak the…
kahaani sunker sabhi ladke apni jageh kaath ki terah apni jageh jam gaye..
is kahaani ki khasiyat hai kahaanikaar ki imaandaari...aur kissagoi..thik manohar shyam joshi kakka ji kahin ki tera lekin yet hum rote hai mehsoos karte hai lekin ant me humaara sar bhi jhuk jaata hai...mujhe lagta hai ye asli kahani hai bina kisi laag lapet ke bina kisi rajniti ke kahi gayi ek anokhi kahaani..is kahaani ka sli mazaa ise padhne me hai

3 comments:

chavannichap said...

dono blog padhe.achchhe hain.dil se likhe gaye hain.
script ka color badlen ya backdrop safed karen.padhne mein dikkat hoti hai.mujhe highlight kar padhna pada.

Stillwater said...

Kahani to achhi hai. Munshi ji? Bolne ko kuchh hai nahin is kahani par. Soch aur karni par kuchh bhi comment karna apni agyanta ke pradarshan hin hoga.
Padhne par kahin se to Dharamvir Bharti ka dhyan aaya. Suraj Ka Satwan Ghoda. Ya, phir Band Gali Ka Aakhri Makan. Kabhi padhiyega unhe. Ab wo bhi nahin rahe.:)

amitabh shankar said...

i dont want you to become a critique or an essayist. write your story and i will love reading that.